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My Beautiful Blade
by Darkjedi 2009-04-08, 11:41
Here I stand
From the cracked mirror
At last, I've never seen clearer
The past's echos nearer and nearer.
You took her!
You took her!
You scratched her!
You bleed her!
Do I remember, amidst all my cries?
Will I forget, those beautiful eyes?
But above my sorrow,
there it lies.
Something that will undo this demise.
My beautiful blade.
Alas! Can't you see?
Your the one
Who's for me
Steady now!
Do dig in!
You're the creature
In the kid
Take my hand
You'll be mine
Now our fates
Intertwined
Let us dance!
Masquerade!
This is the choice
You have made
Recollect
Rectify
You are the joy
Of my life
Drive your point
Deep at heart
Now our love
Does impart
And forever
Never know
The blackened trees
I have grown
And forget
A love today
My most beautiful,
Beautiful blade.
From the cracked mirror
At last, I've never seen clearer
The past's echos nearer and nearer.
You took her!
You took her!
You scratched her!
You bleed her!
Do I remember, amidst all my cries?
Will I forget, those beautiful eyes?
But above my sorrow,
there it lies.
Something that will undo this demise.
My beautiful blade.
Alas! Can't you see?
Your the one
Who's for me
Steady now!
Do dig in!
You're the creature
In the kid
Take my hand
You'll be mine
Now our fates
Intertwined
Let us dance!
Masquerade!
This is the choice
You have made
Recollect
Rectify
You are the joy
Of my life
Drive your point
Deep at heart
Now our love
Does impart
And forever
Never know
The blackened trees
I have grown
And forget
A love today
My most beautiful,
Beautiful blade.
Last edited by Darkjedi on 2009-04-29, 19:22; edited 1 time in total
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by Darkjedi 2009-04-08, 11:57
Did Jtull tell you that?
This is not about "that girl".
This is about another.
A dead one who's death I am still troubled over.
And, I DO NOT want to talk about it any further than that. This is why I write!
Anyways, in the story of the poem, the blade is the one that can undo the the death of the lost one/s.
The main character falls in love with this blade, his saviour.
In the end, his blade shows it's love by stabbing itself into her master.
This is not about "that girl".
This is about another.
A dead one who's death I am still troubled over.
And, I DO NOT want to talk about it any further than that. This is why I write!
Anyways, in the story of the poem, the blade is the one that can undo the the death of the lost one/s.
The main character falls in love with this blade, his saviour.
In the end, his blade shows it's love by stabbing itself into her master.
Last edited by Darkjedi on 2009-05-27, 12:22; edited 1 time in total
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by Shemuel 2009-04-08, 12:37
I'm sorry to hear her death is still troubling you.
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by Shemuel 2009-04-08, 12:42
It's long 
Jk.
You like poetry, don't you? The effort you put in shows.
Jk.
You like poetry, don't you? The effort you put in shows.
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by FlashFreak22 2009-04-08, 17:41
I like it! I think it would do better with longer stanzas though. But that's just me...
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by Darkjedi 2009-04-08, 18:54
Well, at first I felt the same way you do, but when I read it out loud, I discovered that it sounded best to me when split into smaller blocks of stanzas. The poem is intended to be read out loud.
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by FlashFreak22 2009-04-08, 19:05
Yes, all poems are better out loud... unless they suck.
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Re: My Beautiful Blade
by Jtull 2009-04-08, 19:25
Darkjedi wrote:Did Jtull tell you that?
This is not about "that girl".
This is about another.
A dead one who's death I tend to blame myself for.
And, I DO NOT want to talk about it any further than that. This is why I write!
Anyways, in the story of the poem, the blade is the one that can undo the the death of the lost one/s.
The main character falls in love with this blade, his saviour.
In the end, his blade shows it's love by stabbing itself into her master.
I havent said anything. I promice
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