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Ode to Emma
by killerflood 2009-04-11, 01:58
We played in this place...
this place...
this place...
We played in this place...
this place was fun.
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I was playing with you...
with you...
with you...
I was playing with you...
with you I was safe.
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I remember your friendship...
your friendship...
your friendship...
I remember your friendship...
your friendship was pure.
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We played in the summer...
the summer...
the summer...
We played in the summer...
the summers were young.
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Oh how I miss you...
I miss you...
I miss you...
Oh how I miss you...
I miss you real bad.
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I will always remember you...
remember you...
remember you...
I will always remember you...
remember your love.
I was wanting to write a poem, because I was feeling a little creative.
So I wrote about a lost friend that I used to play with in the summers.
I'm always open to criticism!
this place...
this place...
We played in this place...
this place was fun.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I was playing with you...
with you...
with you...
I was playing with you...
with you I was safe.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I remember your friendship...
your friendship...
your friendship...
I remember your friendship...
your friendship was pure.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
We played in the summer...
the summer...
the summer...
We played in the summer...
the summers were young.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Oh how I miss you...
I miss you...
I miss you...
Oh how I miss you...
I miss you real bad.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I will always remember you...
remember you...
remember you...
I will always remember you...
remember your love.
I was wanting to write a poem, because I was feeling a little creative.
So I wrote about a lost friend that I used to play with in the summers.
I'm always open to criticism!
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Re: Ode to Emma
by me naam is m 2009-04-11, 06:00
though slightly repetitive, i like it. but somehow to me it has a rather... flat impression. i dunno, i think it must be in the sentence construction.
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Re: Ode to Emma
by FlashFreak22 2009-04-11, 16:31
Yea! How'd you know? Just kidding. She's in Michigan.
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Re: Ode to Emma
by Karlo 2009-04-12, 06:48
lol flashfreak, ok i see.... *goes knockign at the door and cuts of head of the person* OH! sorry little cat!
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lol
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lol
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Re: Ode to Emma
by Shemuel 2009-04-12, 09:16
Karlo wrote:lol flashfreak, ok i see.... *goes knockign at the door and cuts of head of the person* OH! sorry little cat!
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lol
You know spam is unacceptable
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Re: Ode to Emma
by FlashFreak22 2009-04-12, 09:26
?? How was that spam? And oh yeah, Shem, please keep a tab on Kario. Lately he's necro'd like.... 10 times or something.
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