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Post by zulian 2008-08-26, 00:26

As the sound of wars sing in the distance, a man stands and an army falls. Bodies and corpses litter the ground, as people scream in panic. The darkness unites and we divide. The world turns and the night rises against the sky. Black smoke and arrows fall as the man walks, then runs into the enemy, chopping them down one by one as the crowd of millions surrounds him. He fights and kills, throwing, bashing, burning, and turning, he fights to the very end. By the end of the night he walks away from the scene of madness as the bodies that litter the ground turn into mountains, and the corpses number in millions. He turns and stabs himself through his bowels, takes five steps, and collapses, folding his hands and dying in a gruesome way, ending his life, which was so long...


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Post by zulian 2008-08-28, 14:40

post what ever you think about it?
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Post by Shemuel 2008-08-28, 14:49

Perhaps a tad macabre?
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Post by zulian 2008-08-28, 14:50

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Post by Meganew Trek 2008-08-29, 12:37

A bit hard to read, perhaps you should add punctuation and captialize letters at the beginning of a sentence?
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Post by zulian 2008-09-01, 22:09

can you do it?
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Post by Meganew Trek 2008-09-02, 10:42

Yes.
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Post by Shemuel 2008-09-02, 16:58

Replaced Zulian's old script with Meganew's edited version.
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