Darkness Divided
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Darkness Divided
As the sound of wars sing in the distance, a man stands and an army falls. Bodies and corpses litter the ground, as people scream in panic. The darkness unites and we divide. The world turns and the night rises against the sky. Black smoke and arrows fall as the man walks, then runs into the enemy, chopping them down one by one as the crowd of millions surrounds him. He fights and kills, throwing, bashing, burning, and turning, he fights to the very end. By the end of the night he walks away from the scene of madness as the bodies that litter the ground turn into mountains, and the corpses number in millions. He turns and stabs himself through his bowels, takes five steps, and collapses, folding his hands and dying in a gruesome way, ending his life, which was so long...
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- as the sound of wars sings in the distance a man stands and a army falls bodys and coarpses litter the ground and the people scream in panic the darkness unites and we divide the world turns and the night rises the sky blackens of smoke and arrows fall as the man walks then runs into the enemy chopping them one by one as the crowd of millions surrounds him he fights and kills throwing and bashing burning and turning he fights to the very end. by the end of the night he walks away from his scene of madness as bodys that litter the ground turn into mountains and the coarpses number in millions he turns and stabs himself threw his bouls and takes five steps and collapses folding his hands and dieing in a gruesom way ending his life so long...
zulian- BANNED
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Re: Darkness Divided
post what ever you think about it?
zulian- BANNED
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Re: Darkness Divided
Perhaps a tad macabre?
Shemuel- Captain
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zulian- BANNED
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Re: Darkness Divided
A bit hard to read, perhaps you should add punctuation and captialize letters at the beginning of a sentence?
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Re: Darkness Divided
can you do it?
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Re: Darkness Divided
Replaced Zulian's old script with Meganew's edited version.
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